In the water I would die, beginning a new life in thee,
my soul, my deeds, my love would be given to him.
On a journey to find the true me,
In the water I would die. Beginning a new life in thee,
the roads discovered, challenged me to be,
longing for a day, to walk by his side akin.
In the water I would die. Beginning a new life in thee,
straightening a broken soul, healing from within.
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Today’s writing challenge, is a non-fiction piece inspired by the literary tool, the Triolet (tree-uh-lay).
The Triolet is a form of French Poetry, with the earliest examples written in the 13th Century. It is a stanza poem of eight lines, the rhyme scheme is ABaAabAB. That is, the first, third, fourth, fifth and seventh lines rhyme with each other, and the second, sixth and eighth lines rhyme with each other. It includes a punctuation trick in lines four and seven when lines one, four and seven repeat.
Original photo of mine from Saturday at McKinley Beech, Milwaukee, Wisconsin.
One year ago, my life began.
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I am second.
I will share my experiences, as a child of God, husband to Daniel, father, best friend, brother, son, leader, professor, writer and photographer.
My intention for this blog is to be random, with no plan, no list, no direction and no expectations. Very different from how I lived my past life. My journey has been blessed by the mercy and grace of God and unwavering love. I hope you enjoy reading and sharing my experiences of hurts, laughter, discovery, friendships, Christ, and my family.
Temenos is a safe circle where you can be yourself with peace of mind. Temenos originates from a Greek word which refers to a universal instinct to create a protected, safe space in which to heal, restore and regenerate yourself.
My temenos circle is a place to be still and seek Jesus. It becomes my place to pray, reflect in the word of our Lord to shrink, grow in him, and heal my soul.
What is your temenos circle?
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That was a beautiful triolet. So happy you found your devotion. 💛
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Thank you. I appreciate you kindness. I was my first attempt at a Triolet. I enjoyed the challenge.
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I love the note of hope on which this ends, despite the turmoil in the beginning. Lovely attempt!
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Thank you for sharing. My first Triolet!
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Thank you for reading my blog. No hope no life?
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I really enjoyed reading this. You’ve done an awesome job.
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Thank you my first Triolet!
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It’s awesome!
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Your so sweet !
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A beautiful devotion expressed in an intriguing form.
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Thank you. It was my first attempt at a Triolet!
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You’re welcome 🙂 It’s a tough form and you did a great job with it.
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Such a powerful line you chose for your repetition–keeps bringing us back to that central need.
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Thank you….this line is very spiritually connecting for me emotionally
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I don’t understand the technicalities of poetry, but this sounded great to me. I loved the repetition of “In the water, I would die.” I also really like the hopeful ending!
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Hope is what keeps us living yes?
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I agree with Jenn, the repeating line is perfect and they way you wrote this gave a different tone to the words each time. Nice work!
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Fun challenge. Thank you for the stretch
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